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Spitfire - Draft 4 by Claire Yeowart, written for The Impact:50, uploaded 28 Jul '16 13:45

A World War Two veteran and her granddaughter find a Spitfire in an airport hangar.

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Producers' notes

This is a fresh take on the theme, and we loved the character of Betty, who is fearless, even at 89!

  • The removal of the photo from Kate’s pocket felt clumsy, and we think that the scene would work better if it began with the old black and white photo of Betty and her fellow pilots, held by Betty, and then panning up to the spitfire in front of them.
  • The phrase “one never forgets” feels a little formal, and we suggest this be changed to “you never forget”.

Remember to write a line with a CUT TO: For when the blast wave hits them. Fabulous female characters. Nice work!

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Spitfire - Draft 3 by Claire Yeowart, written for The Impact:50, uploaded 12 Aug '15 14:38

A World War Two veteran and her granddaughter find a Spitfire in an airport hangar.

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Spitfire - Draft 2 by Claire Yeowart, written for The Impact:50, uploaded 12 Jul '15 16:47 @ClaireYeowart

A World War Two veteran and her granddaughter find a Spitfire in an airport hangar.

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Spitfire - Draft 1 by Claire Yeowart, written for The Impact:50, uploaded 10 Jul '15 16:59 @ClaireYeowart

A World War Two veteran and her granddaughter find a Spitfire in an airport hangar.

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