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Digging - Draft 4 by Michael Montgomery, written for The Impact:50, uploaded 03 Aug '16 17:49

An eight year old boy tries to dig a shelter

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This is a nice exploration of how a child deals with the news of the end of the world. 

  • The scene in the kitchen where Lewis goes to get a drink is unnecessary and removes us from the drama. We suggest we remain in the garden with Lewis once he begins digging, and if you do want to include little pauses (e.g. taking a breather, having a drink, gently removing the worm) that these all take place by/in the hole being dug.
  • Trim and tighten. Ask yourself whether every line of description, action, or dialogue is necessary and adds something to the story.

Remember to write a line with a CUT TO: For when the blast wave hits them. This has the potential to be really heartwrenching. Great work, Michael!

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Digging - Draft 3 by Michael Montgomery, written for The Impact:50, uploaded 04 Jan '16 22:21

An eight year old boy tries to dig a shelter

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Digging - Draft 2 by Michael Montgomery, written for The Impact:50, uploaded 30 Jul '15 20:58

An eight year old boy tries to dig a shelter

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Digging - Draft 1 by Michael Montgomery, written for The Impact:50, uploaded 15 Jul '15 19:49

An eight year old boy tries to dig a shelter

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