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Lullaby - Draft 5 by Jane Hamer, written for The Impact:50, uploaded 04 Jun '16 12:53

For one woman, news of the impact is like a gift sent from God.

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Nice and dark, with light at the end of the tunnel.

  • Currently a little overwritten – try reducing by 25%
  • Remove novelistic writing that cannot be filmed because we’re not inside the characters’ heads, such as the last line (“knowing they’ll be together again…”)
  • Tone down some of the description so that she’s not someone who has totally lost everything and would frankly be in an institution. She should be struggling to hold it together, but not living like a crack addict.

Remember to write a line with a CUT TO: For when the blast wave hits them. This script will make a really dark reflection for some of the lighter stories, and explores the last moments of a very interesting character. 

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Lullaby - Draft 4 by Jane Hamer, written for The Impact:50, uploaded 04 Jan '16 16:59

For one woman, news of the impact is like a gift sent from God.

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Lullaby - Draft 3 by Jane Hamer, written for The Impact:50, uploaded 01 Jan '16 14:06

For one woman, news of the impact is like a gift sent from God.

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Lullaby - Draft 2 by Jane Hamer, written for The Impact:50, uploaded 19 Aug '15 09:35

For one woman, news of the impact is like a gift sent from God.

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Lullaby - Draft 1 by Jane Hamer, written for The Impact:50, uploaded 10 Aug '15 16:01 @McSqueak10

For one woman, news of the impact is like a gift sent from God.

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