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I Love You - Draft 5 by Andrew Viner, written for The Impact:50, uploaded 14 Jun '16 10:10

A telephone engineer works valiantly so that people can still call each other with messages of love. But is there one for him?

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Producers' notes

This is a very sweet story with an original setting.

  • Remove the description of Sophie as extremely overweight to open the part up to all performers
  • Consider switching the characters’ genders around, as we think this will remove any hint of stereotype.
  • Technology is always very challenging to pull off on screen so it may be better to pare this down and to relay the relevant information via dialogue instead. Not an ideal situation BUT it may be resorted to anyway if the audience does not understand the graphs and charts visually. Experience tells us that this is likely to happen.
  • The references to the Christmas party and emergency services feel a little contrived and could be cut, and the dialogue in general could be shortened.
  • From the start, there should be a very clear pull between the characters that they haven’t fully expressed. This is the final opportunity for them to declare their love for each other, and we would like to see more tension and truth in the final draft.

Remember to write a line with a CUT TO: For when the blast wave hits them. Great work, Andrew!

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I Love You - Draft 4 by Andrew Viner, written for The Impact:50, uploaded 08 Jun '16 16:45

A telephone engineer works valiantly so that people can still call each other with messages of love. But is there one for him?

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I Love You - Draft 3 by Andrew Viner, written for The Impact:50, uploaded 30 Dec '15 13:36

A telephone engineer works valiantly so that people can still call each other with messages of love. But is there one for him?

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I Love You - Draft 2 by Andrew Viner, written for The Impact:50, uploaded 17 Dec '15 17:48

A telephone engineer works valiantly so that people can still call each other with messages of love. But is there one for him?

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I Love You - Draft 1 by Andrew Viner, written for The Impact:50, uploaded 16 Dec '15 14:46 @andrewviner

A telephone engineer works valiantly so that people can still call each other with messages of love. But is there one for him?

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