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A rugby team go back for their injured team mates.
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This is a fresh take on the theme, and flies in the face of expectations nicely.
- We suggest that the first half page be rewritten to reduce the amount of “tech speak” and to provide a clearer story set-up. The jargon makes it harder to understand for many.
- Make the patient’s illness generic, to give the filmmakers more flexibility.
Remember to write a line with a CUT TO: For when the blast wave hits them. This script has a lot of heart. Well done!
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